New and Updated Script

We have decided to change the script as the previous script seemed to make the story a little longer than expected. I will show the group the new version of the script to see if they like it, also as in the previous script I have also added the narrative to help us understand where the characters have to speak, as there is little speech involved.

SCRIPT:

1 man is getting prepared for something, looking dodgy, scuffling through a black bag. The area he is in is dark and eerie looking.Audience is left in uncertainty as to what he is preparing for.He walks of and another person walks of with him.As he is closing the zip of the black bag he says “yea, its all in there!”
The next shot is of the same guys going into a van and slamming the door shut.
There is then a shot of the driver of the van pulling his balaclava onto his head and shutting the door. Then there is a shot following the knife and the bloody apron. The next shot is a close up of the driver starting up the van.Then there is a long shot of the girl walking out of a building which looks like her house, she answers her phone and starts talking in a foreign language, as the camera follows her from behind the bushes.The next shot again is of the van.Then it cuts to a extreme claustrophobic shot of the girl still talking.Then we cut back to the van.The girl hears a noise in the bushes and starts looking paniced.
Next shot is from inside the van, of the men jumping out to grab her. The speech used in this shot is “quick quick quick go go go!” They violently grab the girl and push her into the van as she screams. One of the men says to the other one to “close the door, close the door.Come on!” The van is seen driving of.
The next shot is a close up of the girls phone on the phone, and on the screen it says call ended.
Then the girl is seen inside the van, with the men which seem to be quite insane as she is screaming for help in her language and he is saying “you’ll be ok,you’ll be alright!” repeatedly.Then it fades out to a black screen which is meant to symbolise a passing of time. The next shot is of the girl in a park, probably around 4 in the morning looking like shes ran away from them and is hiding. Then we see the shot of the van going to look for her.